Here follows two apologies issued by Serena Williams after an on-court outburst during a semi-final match at the United States Open. The first apology was issued the day after the event; an “amended” apology came the following day.
Note the diction and selection of detail of the first apology. Why was it “amended”?
"Last night everyone could truly see the passion I have for my job. Now that I have had time to gain my composure, I can see that while I don't agree with the unfair line call, in the heat of battle I let my passion and emotion get the better of me and as a result handled the situation poorly. I would like to thank my fans and supporters for understanding that I am human and I look forward to continuing the journey, both professionally and personally, with you all as I move forward and grow from this experience."
"I want to amend my press statement of yesterday, and want to make it clear as possible - I want to sincerely apologize FIRST to the lines woman, Kim Clijsters, the USTA and mostly tennis fans everywhere for my inappropriate outburst. I'm a woman of great pride, faith and integrity, and I admit when I'm wrong. I need to make it clear to all young people that I handled myself inappropriately and it's not the way to act -- win or lose, good call or bad call in any sport, in any manner.
I like to lead by example. We all learn from experiences both good and bad, I will learn and grow from this, and be a better person as a result."
Here is an article about the event written by a senior editor at TENNIS magazine. He appears to argue that Serena Williams was unjustly penalized. What strategies does the writer use to persuade his audience? Is his argument convincing?
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