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11/16/15

Main Body Feedback:

  • Vagueness (again)
  • Redundant context in dialogue – When Bills says, ‘“Shut up, Tessie,’ Bill said
  • Informal writing – “the story is all about male dominance…”
  • Avoid use of figurative and idiomatic language. Stay literal
  • Jumbled dialogue and narrative. Split and provide separate/individual context
  • Awkward, stilted context – “This idea is explained when…” “When the author writes…”
  • Problem: analysis/ideas are unclear based on the evidence that is being used
  • Is analysis/ideas warranted by evidence? Does the evidence that you have selected allow you to make that claim or have that idea?
  • Simplify complex language




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